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glycerine
04-29-2004, 11:36 PM
now i rarely use a rhyme more than once per song. i usually have just as many literary devices. this is the closest to rap i get. I'm sorry bout the linkin park feel. but once you start rhyming its hard to stop., there are a couple of typos

4/29/04
THE END- the swordfish
I guess this really is the end
I guess this really is the end
In my head is a fire
Ignited by desire
Full of anguish and pain
My chest is see through
So you know what I will do
My heart controls my brain
Oh I could probably die
Before I looked you in your eye
And told you we were through
I never wanted to say these things
Because of all the tears it brings
I never could hurt you
But I
Don’t think this is working anymore
But every time
I try to leave I come back to the door
And I don’t want to feel animosity between us
I just want to do my best not to be facetious
As I say one last time, perhaps to loud
You can’t be mine, right now
I guess this really is the end
I guess this really is the end
And if she doesn’t like me will it bring you light?
Cuz heck then you got nothing to fear right?
I mean hey
Why don’t you just sabatoge the whole thing to get your way
(hard powerchord part like distortion and punky stuff dudududu dowdowdow)
you say you love me but we can’t be just friends
cuz it hurts so much to no end
but just last week
you cheated on me
its tongue in cheek
but that’s how it’s gotta be
Because you lied
Love was crucified
It died
You cried
It resurrected with a nails in its hands and a thorn in its side
But that’s where the similarities ends
Because after that our relationship got the bends
It didn’t rise into heaven
But after about 6 days
Maybe it was seven
But anyways
After that you still hadn’t treated me good
You did all the things wrong that one could
And I am sorry it had to be your friend my heart fell for
But that’s what happens when I just sit at your door
When your friends come by you let them in
And I just sit there still waiting
I see them come and go and so I got up and went
After all the time and tears that I had spent
But you still take me the swordfish from the ocean
And instead of getting food in a rapid motion
I can now get food from you for devotion
Yes I think this diet will do that’s my notion
To put the sharp nose in sun lotion
Afraid of the water because of the waves exploding
Can’t go home knowing
That the land where the wind is blowing
Has so much going
But now I guess it’s flowing
Cuz I’m ready to get back from where I was stolen
I guess
Something went off inside of me
Made me change completely
I’m a new man I guess I went through the passions
Because now I’m dressed in a fashion
Ready to find someone new
But I still wanna be friends with you
Maybe you’ll find a guy
To make you feel satisfied
And then maybe me and her you and him
We can all get together and be great friends
Ha
I guess this really is the end
I guess this really is the end
But honestly
Talk to me
If a plus b
Equals c
You want some sanctity
I’m ready to look and see
So why aren’t we all happy?
I don’t know
I wish I did
But there ya go
Another mystery kid
Takes all I am
And all we were
Clashes history with her…
And cannot accept defeat
Hit me when I’m weak
Maybe I’ll come begging please
And whoosh you off your feet
And you’ll be back with me
And all pain will be set free
But it’s no longer that easy
I guess this really is the end
I guess this really is the end
Because consequence
To this providence
I can’t jump a fence
Without violence
So I come back to your front step
Telling you I’m sorry I left
But what happens to my baggage check
I just leave my balls on the deck
And come back home you’re little doggie
Eating all the scraps that you feed me
From you’re table like a deity
Providince, I can’t see?
Will you screw with me?
No not lit’relly
You’ll make it seem like we were meant to be
By planning each uncertainty
From a democracy
To make you queen Kelly
Open the curtain see
The wizard’s not who it seems
So we go on you and me
Forever eternity
Can you sense the irony?
The sarcasm tone pitch and key
Coming from a bitch like me?
Spilling out constantly
Like a cut in my knee
From hitting them on the floor repeatedly
Maybe I’m joking and you can’t see
So I’ll laugh at myself hehe
Cuz no one else laughs at me
I never was real funny
Even when I told a joke
About the old folks
Acting like slow pokes
Eating there honey oats
Sitting in row boats
Happy as scapegoats
Set free by pesos
Straight from mexEco
Now as perfect as two notes
Played on the trombones
Won’t matter to me though
I still got up, go
I guess this really is the end
I guess this really is the end
What sin
Did I put in
That made this begin again
Put in a tailspin
Made me less a man
So I look round the bend
And I guess it is the end
I guess we won’t be friends
If you can’t see it’s to dim
Believe in me then
I’ll light up you again
So you can see it’s not a trend
It’s me being unable to send
Another boy I recommend
Got off just to fend
Justify the very blend
Of bullcrap that you just put in
Maybe
Someday
Away
We’ll stay
Far from pain
Away the fray
Just like it was a week ago yesterday
Maybe will just lay
At the end of the day
And maybe will say
Wasn’t that break gay
And the sun will shine its ray
Ready to play
Right outside of tegu cay
Whatever you do and whatever you may
Will we be through can we finally pray
Without feeling
Like villains
Hypocrites
Speaking with
Out so much as a dime put in
I guess this really is the end
I guess this really is the end
Blowing your bubble saying it is us
Taking your gun out call it justice
It’s overkill
You’re thrill
Makes me ill
Gotta take a pill
Not to get my fill
But to climb the hill
Like jack and jill
Uphill both ways what a deal
Holy crap can this be for real
“Is that uh how you really feel?”
Yeah, girl I no longer kneel
At the feet of the queen of sex and peril
Waiting for you to get my next meal
Paying with a thousand dollar bill
That I never even had to steal
Because instead you told me “kill”
And I could not submit (no will)
So I stood there and heard cries shrill
I heard them then I hear it still
Waiting for you to let me chill
Before I can break this final seal
And take that swordfish by the gill
And toss him on the grill
No tricks no lights no frill
Just plain old me John Michael
I guess this really is the end
I guess this really is the end
I'm just joking once again
don't take it all in
you never paid attention
even when you stayed after school like detention
at the slightest name or mention
of an old friend you get itchin
like i belong in an oven in the kitchen
i guess i should stop bitchin
cuz at least i'm free and not a casuality of fishing
kelly you'd make fine politician
i'd vote for you a woman on a mission
turn all subtraction to addition
get numbers to be an addiction
like a man with a vision
headed for collision
doesn't even see his engine
go straight into predition
not even any competition
so run Kelly for election
I’ll give you protection
If you put up for suspect ion
Me or all of the above as the ceilings’ lost direction
Waiting for love but it’s not a feeling it’s a connection
I guess this really is the end
I guess this really is the end


so whaddaya think? it's not the normal kind of stuff i use in my band but... its only one song. we try to do all styles that we can pull off good, but still sound like us. i have written like 6 folders full of songs adn i write about 6 every day and its not qaunity over quality either. it takes about 10 mins to write a song for me. in fact a magazine called me the next rivers cuomo. We have just got a record deal with a major label so you'll be hearing from us real soon. we already have enough great material for a full career so will be putting out a lot of albums.

el fregadero
04-30-2004, 12:13 AM
That would be one ****ing long rap song.

OssMan
04-30-2004, 12:22 AM
That would be one ****ing long rap song.

glycerine
04-30-2004, 12:25 AM
yep we are influenced heavily by pink floyd. so I do a lot of long songs with parts and my second album will be double disc the first one will be simple except for two of the songsit will be pretty much nothing that new. the second album is when the crap hits the fan. we have Rock symphonies. and by we i mean i write everything they play it i sing and play lead and other instruments occasionally. Linkin park hasn't influenced me at all realistically. the thing is when you start writing songs everything sounds like rap at first. its been about 3 years since i wrote a song with rap aspects. Some are long, some are normal 3 minute catch stuck in your head songs. I don't really like to say i am influenced by people because that backs me in a corner like i am imitating them, and honestly i taugh myself everything i know. i got to were i could write a good song without any interference or any reference and write lyrics about anything, no matter if i was facing it or not. then i started listening to music and stuff and sort of put my own spin on old songs. but i try not to listen to music if i am going to compose anything or write lyrics. otherwise i may use something accidentily. this song has some cliche lines in it but. i believe songs should be like a book, you listento it for aesthetic value. maybe one day people will listen to songs like movies , once. i have enough good material for a career of music already and i am 17. i am still writing, i havent even reached my prime. my hope is to change music, yeah i'll have catchy singles but what i really want is to be able to realese an album like all the time that way if its good or bad the next one is coming. and you don't even have time to digest one before boom! another one hits you. then some will be like wow this is a great song, whoa theres another, that one was lacking but hey that ne rocks! i ma talking almost weekly or monthly. I have enough already and if i just record and put out the stuff i have now i could make about 30 cds. the only problem is the label not being able to do things quick enough. don't worry about the stuff being not top quality it will be. it already is in the simple demo stage. I write more than Rivers. I listen to music for my own satisfaction. i write music as a completely different thing. by influenced i mean given the okay by. I will change the world.

el fregadero
04-30-2004, 01:32 AM
I ask you: please, please use paragraphs. Much easier to read.

But Pink Floyd is the goods, so I'm letting it slide this time.

road doggy dogg
04-30-2004, 02:50 AM
Why don’t you just sabatoge the whole thing to get your way
(hard powerchord part like distortion and punky stuff dudududu dowdowdow)

:love:

Boondock Saint
04-30-2004, 02:55 AM
Yeah, I didn't bother reading your second post. But I saw Pink Floyd, so :y: and a rep.