Hows This?(RAP FANS)

[Mic Blaze]

I come here alot and thought I should post a verse of mine from a mixtape Im doin wit my crew Royal Fam.

Yal niggas say ya want war then strap up ya back pack/Get ya gun,rations,glow sticks,and head ya ass to Iraq/Cuz you dont really want it wit Murda Ill turn you like Canibus/Yal niggas fussin and poutin cuz ya cant handle this/Mad cuz I took over this game like nigga was George W/Pain was my Jeb did it the Game way now who really lovin you?/No one nigga cuz you been lost like the 04 Lakers season/And yal's lack of skills was obviousily the reason/Im sicker than the patient wit Gonaherpesyphilaids/Still tryin to get made and paid/Gave yal false hope when I said I was gon step down/Not R Kelly but yal gotta step now/Not in the name of love but in the name of Mike G/You wit a lengthly career seems highly unlikely/Im ill when Im straight off the dome so what am I when Im structurin/Death to all my words is like the switch blade puncturin/The old man in 12 Angry Men/But Im not a mexican kid but then again/Im kinda tan look more spanish than black/Could pass as Arab and say Im from Iraq/Make the airport security pull out the guns and tazors/Ima be wit tin foil made to look like razors/Through an acent and say Im takin over/Then laugh and say "Guess the break's over"/Get em off they fat ass and burn a few calories/George's paronoia is raisin they salaries/They said back in the day he liked a little of the nose candy/Old habbits die hard and they seize millions everyday so I guess shit's dandy/Country being ran by a redneck powerhungry coke fiend/I liked the old president he was just a sex fiend/Just got a little dome while his wife wasnt home/What you not gettin at home you gon go else where to find it/And its just in the human male nature to hide it/He just head from a hoe that really aint that trife/Cuz he dedicated his life to his wife/So that gotta tell you somethin best give him some/Shouldve been the first to swallow his cum/I know pretty soon Bush gon end up blowin up the world/Thats why I fail to stay wit one girl/Taste em all before the day we no longer exsist/And when you Mike Game how the f*ck can you resist

[Supreme Olajuwon]

It can be hard to rhyme things together when they rhyme but they have different syllables stressed. Like "backpack" and "Iraq" because you stress "back" but then you stress "raq" in Iraq. Same thing with "Mike G" and "unlikely." I dunno it just sounds weird

not bad though

[Gertner]

pretty decent. i hate political agendas in music though.

[Kris P Lettus]

Glow sticks??

[Savio]

To clutterd. (didn't read)

[Gero X]

Personally I wasnt feelin it, it reminded me of Eminem in parts which is never a good thing.

also how do you say this: Gonaherpesyphilaids
I get its a bunch of STDs combined into one word but :wtf:

[Hardkore Kidd J]

You got some madd skills my friend madd skills. :y: :y:

[Mic Blaze]

Glow sticks??

Yea them thangs you crack and shake and they glow. They got the small ones at raves but the military got them. I remember my dad having some in his army back pack

[Kane Knight]

You know what would be really cool?

If you actually posted that in a form that was readable.

[Kris P Lettus]

Yea them thangs you crack and shake and they glow. They got the small ones at raves but the military got them. I remember my dad having some in his army back pack

LOLz

I know what they are just wondered why you mentioned them...

Are the military holding a rave or summat??

[Mic Blaze]

For those who complained here is a more "readable" version

Yal niggas say ya want war then strap up ya back pack
Get ya gun,rations,glow sticks,and head ya ass to Iraq
Cuz you dont really want it wit Murda Ill turn you like Canibus
Yal niggas fussin and poutin cuz ya cant handle this
Mad cuz I took over this game like nigga was George W
Pain was my Jeb did it the Game way now who really lovin you?
No one nigga cuz you been lost like the 04 Lakers season
And yal's lack of skills was obviousily the reason/
m sicker than the patient wit Gonaherpesyphilaids
Still tryin to get made and paid
Gave yal false hope when I said I was gon step down
Not R Kelly but yal gotta step now
Not in the name of love but in the name of Mike G
You wit a lengthly career seems highly unlikely
Im ill when Im straight off the dome so what am I when Im structurin
Death to all my words is like the switch blade puncturin
The old man in 12 Angry Men
But Im not a mexican kid but then again
Im kinda tan look more spanish than black
Could pass as Arab and say Im from Iraq
Make the airport security pull out the guns and tazors
Ima be wit tin foil made to look like razors
Throw on an acent and say Im takin over
Then laugh and say "Guess the break's over"
Get em off they fat ass and burn a few calories
George's paronoia is raisin they salaries
They said back in the day he liked a little of the nose candy
Old habbits die hard and they seize millions everyday so I guess shit's dandy
Country being ran by a redneck powerhungry coke fiend
I liked the old president he was just a sex fiend
Just got a little dome while his wife wasnt home
What you not gettin at home you gon go else where to find it
And its just in the human male nature to hide it
He just head from a hoe that really aint that trife
Cuz he dedicated his life to his wife
So that gotta tell you somethin best give him some
Shouldve been the first to swallow his cum
I know pretty soon Bush gon end up blowin up the world
Thats why I fail to stay wit one girl
Taste em all before the day we no longer exsist
And when you Mike Game how the f*ck can you resist

[Gero X]

I still aint seeing how u flow some of those lines, put an mp3 up or something

[deathtrap]

dude, the first bit has the word nigga to much

[Kane Knight]

dude, the first bit has the word nigga to much

It's to distract from the constipated flow.

[el fregadero]

<font color=teal>Too much profanity.

*turns on "Killing In The Name"*</font>

:shifty:

[Gero X]

It's to distract from the constipated flow.

:lol: Yeah it does look like he has too many or too few sylablles in every single line but apparently its a real verse hes put down so it must fit with the beat.

The only way i can see him rapping that is like Roscoe P Coldchain (http://www.startrakmusic.com/web/media/rosco_MaskNGloveStyle.mp3), and he has no flow at all :o

[Mic Blaze]

Well maybe you guys might like the remix I wrote to Jay-Z's "Threat"

[Intro]
Yo once a pimp gets threats
That's right, that's the - the that's, that's threats them
And I'm serious about mine, I'm so sin-surr
And I, nigga I'll kill ya, I'll chop ya up
Put ya inside the mattress like drug money nigga

[Jay-Z]
Yeah, I done told you niggaz
9 or 10 times stop ****in with me
I done told you niggaz
9 albums, stop ****in with me
I done told you niggaz
The 9 on me, stop ****in with me
You niggaz must got 9 lives
9th wonder

[Verse One]
Put that knife in ya, take a little bit of life from ya
Am I frightenin ya? Shall I continue?
I put the gun to ya, I let it sing you a song
I let it hum to ya, the other one sing along
Now it's a duet, and you wet, when you check out
the technique from the 2 tecs and I don't need two lips
To blow this like a trumpet you dumb shit
This is a un-usual musical I conductin
You lookin at the black Warren Buffett so all critics can duck sick
I don't care if you C. Delores Tuck-it
Or you Bill O'Reilly, you only rylin me up
For three years, they had me peein out of a cup
Now they bout to free me up, whatchu think I'm gon' be, what?
Rehabilitated, man I still feel hatred
I'm young black and rich so they wanna strip me naked, but
You never had me like Christina Aguiler-y
But catch me down the Westside, drivin like Halle Berry
Or the FDR, in the seat of my car
Screamin out the sunroof death to y'all
You can't kill me, I live forever through these bars
I put the wolves on ya, I put a price on your head
The whole hood'll want ya, you startin to look like bread
I send them boys at ya, I ain't talkin bout Feds
Nigga them body-snatchers, nigga you heard what I said

[Chorus]
I make 'em wait for you 'til five in the mornin
Put your smarts on the side of your garment
Nigga stop ****in with me
R. -- I. -- P.

[Interlude]
That's right there nigga, nigga I'm wild
Nigga I keep trash bags with me
Never know when you gotta dump a nigga off
This sin-surr, this some sin-surr SHIT right hurr!

[Verse Two]
Grown man I put hands on you
I dig a hole in the desert, they build The Sands on you
Lay out blueprint plans on you
We Rat Pack niggaz, let Sam tap dance on you
Then, I Sinatra shot ya God damn you
... I put the boy in the box like David Blaine
Let the audience watch, it ain't a thang
Y'all wish I was frontin, I George Bush the button
Front of all you in your car lift up your hood nigga run it
Then lift up your whole hood like you got oil under it
Your boy got the goods y'all don't want nuttin of it
Like, castor oil, I Castor Troy you
Change your face or the bullets change all that for you
... y'all niggaz is targets
Y'all garages for bullets, please don't make me park it
in your upper level, valet a couple strays
from the 38 special, nigga, God bless you

[Chorus]

[Interlude]
Yeah I'm threatening ya, YEAH I'm threatening ya!
Who you thank you dealin with?
They call me Chris, nigga I been makin threats
since I been in kindergarten nigga!
Huh, ask about me, see if you ain't heard

[Verse Three]
When you cats speak its more like watchin comicveiw
Cuz you makin jokes cuz what you say you dont do
You makin THREATS pimp you straight speakin jive
Mike Game known to serve it to ya raw bring it to ya live
Talkin like you big but you actually make the perfect target
Throw some bullets yo way so fast you can say I Bret Farved it
On my waist, under my seat, on my nightstand theres a burner or 2
To light yal niggas up like a Philly had somethin in common wit you
Kill or get killed you say it as if its slogan or motto
You a say you player well Ima put you in a Grand Theft Auto
Type of situation bitch Ill have ya Breakin like an '83 Ice-T
No Kangols gold chains or adidas just my lil gun you and me
Red dot yo fo' head you screamin "ITS ELECTRIC"
Life cut short but you really aint seen nothin yet prick
You got the 45 dead in ya chest like a Jordan throwback
Time done passed its too late nigga you cant go back
**6 Gunshots***

[Outro]
Whattup? Mother****er I keep three mother****ers what?
Nigga I'll throw a Molotov cocktail through your momma's momma's house
Nigga what the - where everybody live!
Undercover nigga take your teeth out your mouth nigga
Chew your food up and put the shit back in your mouth nigga
and help you swallow
Nigga I take a mop handle off nigga
And sweep nigga - hold on, I'll be - nigga what?

[Kane Knight]

Remix? :lol:

[Mic Blaze]

Remix? :lol:

Whats so ****in funny about it?

[Kane Knight]

Whats so ****in funny about it?

Sorry, if you're writing your own words, you're not really reMIXing as much as reWITING and COVERing.

I just found it funny is all.

[Kane Knight]

Now...

Take a deep breath, relax, and try not to take it like the end of the world...

...Be one with the flow...

[Downunder]

blah blah blah nigga
blah blah blah nigga
blah nigga blah
blah nigga nigga

get a new word homie.

[JJ Moore]

nigga nigga co co bop?