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If you're serious about it, take a few acting classes or read a few books, they'll help you out greatly. You don't seem very comfortable 'winging it'/talking on the fly, there are lots of pauses that go on just a bit too long. Write down the main points you want to get across in your promo, not too many that you'll struggle to remember though and hit them, you rambled a bit without getting a point across at times. Steal material from others, song lyrics, lines on TV, watch any good manager from Bobby Heenan to Gilligan Gordon, you can pick things up from anywhere. You looked like you were on the verge of smiling/laughing a few times, which is probably the worst thing you can do if you're trying to make anything seem 'real'. But that should happen less when you feel less nervous/uncomfortable. And practice in the mirror. You'll feel like a complete dick doing it and you might wanna do it when nobody is around but the more you practice, the better you'll get and more comfortable you'll be. If you can cut a serious promo whilst staring at your own face in the mirror, doing it in front of a crowd is nothing. Even facials, mannerisms etc, especially those actually since you can do them quietly and not worry about someone hearing you shout about prayers and vitamins from the bathroom Watch a shitload of promos. Etc etc.